"Your true test, of course, will be a longer story with more moving of characters around a scene, with more complicated motivations and a full suspense plot (with sex scene).

I've almost given up on trying to get all that right! Sometimes I think, if we really sat down and thought about what we were trying to achieve, we would never write at all. Remember this is meant to be a fun hobby, first and foremost. And I think someone's excitement and sense of fun/ urgency to tell the story when they are writing is often the most wonderful part, and outweighs stylistic elements in making a fic a gripping and memorable read.